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Documentation Video Draft 1 (07-07-2014)
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Longer breaks with SFX between sentences to slow down the tempo. -bastianilso
- Go through video and smooth (subsurf) objects. -bastianilso
fix transitions on silhouettes consisting of more than one object. -bastianilso
shaking cup/book at 0:09 was pretty scary. -hashem
- have added some sfx to establish that its falling. hope that helps? -bastian
- tiling of various clips at 0:30 is hard to visually comprehend because it's hard to see where one square ends and the other begins. Maybe some borders or separation would help? Or maybe fading in and starting each square one at a time, so the viewer has time to give each square attention? -hashem
- The squiggly '+' at 0:43 makes me uncomfortable. -hashem
Why is there a white underline for the text entry at 1:10? -hashem
The flashing tile pattern at 1:26 is distracting. -hashem
- Made the disco floor more subtle now. Might remove it completely if it doesn't work out. -bastianilso
I'd avoid using the scribble ofr the lines of text in the book, Just use grey rectangles -jimmac
- updated. also made the symbolics a bit smaller in second shot for that animation. -bastian
the transitions feel great. in terms of animation it's great. I feel like the style isn't quite matching however the fullcolor icons clash with the other elements. The symbolics are a fit made in heaven -jimmac
- changed all icons to their symbolic equivalent, hopefully the style should be less clashing now. -bastianilso
- I'd use polari for the last irc note -jimmac
I don't understand why "get work done" at 0:42 is shown with a picture of the beach. -hashem
the suset photo with the gnome wallpaper triangles looks cheesy, i'd steer clear from photos for this -jimmac
- removed the photo and threw in a gradient instead, if that doesn't work out I'll go with a flat color from the tango theme. -bastianilso
- music which can be heard on laptop speakers -karen
- I'll ask people to submit some suggestions for free music we can use, that might suit better. -bastianilso